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classic old school! young punks just starting out, take copious notes!I-)
What a story contained so effortlessly in that ad!
The parenthetical is out of place and messes up the flow. I would cut it entirely. If they insist on including text therein, I'd rewrite it as "...better not buy one now. It'll take too long to get a new VW wagon into bad enough shape.Think about it. The body's been welded..."
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classic old school! young punks just starting out, take copious notes!
ReplyDeleteI-)
What a story contained so effortlessly in that ad!
ReplyDeleteThe parenthetical is out of place and messes up the flow. I would cut it entirely. If they insist on including text therein, I'd rewrite it as "...better not buy one now. It'll take too long to get a new VW wagon into bad enough shape.
ReplyDeleteThink about it. The body's been welded..."